tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1886111747583128011.post7343128887021584200..comments2023-04-27T00:23:16.765-07:00Comments on Way ahead of my time: Some story panelsjoonkirahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16138815786128739227noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1886111747583128011.post-90908094930061060682013-01-22T16:41:19.451-08:002013-01-22T16:41:19.451-08:00Thanks James! Wise words bro,
I do have more esta...Thanks James! Wise words bro, <br />I do have more establishing shots that comes before this, of the whole setting of the village and dad (but not the son). they were rather poorly and hastily done so I thought I 'd clean them up a bit before posting :) <br />I do agree that I need contrast between the characters..I'll try harder!!!<br />Thanks again!<br />joonkirahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16138815786128739227noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1886111747583128011.post-91659503066865749792013-01-22T16:26:49.271-08:002013-01-22T16:26:49.271-08:00This is a good beginning to get the idea out. But...This is a good beginning to get the idea out. But right now the information is just happening as events, there isn't a point of perspective or strong voice to these events. <br /><br />1. Have more establishment of both the location and of the characters. Set up the father as a hunter and traditional caveman by having him carry up a prey with him. Give him a spear and more ape-like/caveman way of moving. Set up the son better as a being an evolution in the species.<br />2. Also, you need more acting poses to convey the thoughts clearer (or you need dialogue included with these panels).<br /><br />I do want to see more to see more of where this goes. Thanks for sharing! (Also, publish more panels at a time--don't be afraid to setup multiple panels in an image: http://benbalistreri.blogspot.com/2005_12_01_archive.htmlAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03038309680602251744noreply@blogger.com